一、原文呈现 二、思维路径 三、参考范文 四、范文解析 五、提炼归纳
原文呈现
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Arriving in Sydney on his own from India, my husband , Rashid, stayed in a hotel for a short time while looking for a house for me and our children as we would go there when he made everything settled.
During the first week of his stay, he went out one day to do some shopping. He almost got lost in those unfamiliar blocks. When he came back in the late afternoon, he discovered that his suitcase was gone. He was extremely worried as the suitcase had all his important papers, including his passport. For a while, he was overwhelmed with depression with no one to turn to.
He reported the case to the police and then sat there，lost and lonely in a strange city, thinking of the terrible troubles of getting all the paperwork organized again from a distant country while trying to settle down in a new one.
Late in the evening, the phone rang. It was a stranger. He was trying to pronounce my husband’s name and was asking him a lot of questions. Then he said they had found a pile of papers in their trash can（垃圾桶）that had been left out on the footpath.
My husband rushed to their home to find a kind family holding all his papers and documents. Their young daughter had gone to the trash can and found a pile of unfamiliar papers. Her parents had carefully sorted them out, although they had found mainly foreign addresses on most of the documents. At last they had seen a half-written letter in the pile in which my husband had given his new
telephone number to a friend. My husband was so excited about the return of the suitcase. Meanwhile,
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the kindness of this family made him feel that this place could be a new start, a new home for a brand new life. 注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 应使用5个以上短文标有下划线的关键词语； 3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词。 Paragraph 1:
In order to thank this family,…
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A few weeks later, my children and I arrived in Sydney.
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思维路径
1 核心内容
文本主要内容为：主人公Rashid来到陌生的城市悉尼，打算找房子开始他的新生活。然而他的手提箱却意外丢失，包括里面所有的重要文件，他向警方报案，在这座陌生城市他感到孤独和无助。幸运的是，最后手提箱被一个善良的家庭捡到，并顺利回到Rashid手中。 2 写作思路
（1）明确故事人物关系（characters）。故事中主要人物为Rashid，捡到旅行箱的热心家庭。
（2）理清故事主要事件(events)。Rashid来到陌生城市准备找房子安顿下来；结果意外丢失其重要的旅行箱；旅行箱被当地一户善良的人家捡到，失而复得。
（3）根据已知人物、事件及续写段落首句预测故事发展（development）。故事总体的发展应该是主人公Rashid为了表示对这户家庭的感谢晚上请他们一家在餐馆吃饭，同时也聊到了Rashid的经历以及在陌生城市的迷惘和无助。这户人家在知道了Rashid的事情之后，决定帮助Rashid找房子，同时帮助他熟悉街区，一来一往之后，Rashid和他们成为了挚友。几个星期之
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后，Rashid的妻子和孩子也来到了悉尼，他们的房子已经定下来，开启了他们人生的一段新旅程。
（4）结合下划线词罗列写作要点（points）。结合下划线词和文本内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过问以下问题来获取写作要点“According to the story, what would Rashid do to thank this family? How could he find his house?等”第二段可以问以下问题来获取写作要点：“What would happen when Rashid’s family came to Sydney? Would they have a new life in this unfamiliar city, why?等”。
参考范文
In order to thank this family, Rashid invited them to a dinner in a nearby restaurant. Rashid told them he was a newcomer in this city and wanted to find a house to settle down here waiting for his family to join him. “When I found out that my suitcase was missing, I was disappointed and hopeless. Thank you sincerely for your help. What a timely assistance for me! ” Rashid said. This family could have chosen to ignore this suitcase. However, they didn’t. They found out the owner out of their kindness and turned this trash into a treasure. “You are welcome, Rashid. I heard that there are some houses for sale in my neighborhood. I can show you around, if you’re interested.” Again, thanks to this kind family, Rashid found a sweet home.
A few weeks later, my children and I arrived in Sydney. My husband had prepared a new home for us surrounded by kind neighbors. Though the beginning of the story was filled with terrible troubles, it worked out perfectly in the end. This family let us feel the warmth from this unfamiliar city. A small kindness can indeed make a difference.（除给定词外，160 words）
范文解析
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的拓展。根据故事发展的线索，范文第一段将续写Rashid为了回报这个家庭的善举请他们在餐馆里。于是Rashid向他们叙说了自己的处境，而捡到手提箱的家庭又一次帮助Rashid找到了住处。第二段，Rashid的家人来到悉尼，而此时，Rashid已经安顿好了一切，虽然这个城市对他们来说仍旧陌生，但是他们相信这是一个值得安家定居的地方因为当地人的善行。在故事的最后，再一次点名主题。
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提炼归纳
01合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要读通给定文本，把握故事的人物和事件。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在该练习中，我们通过4个问题来拓展并整理自己的写作思路，这4个问题以Rashid以及其家人为表达的主体，问题之间有一定的逻辑联系，符合故事发展的合理结局。 02有效运用连接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段（connectives）的有效运用，例如范文中我们用了However，though来说明事件的转折，again表示Rashid再一次对这户家庭的感谢。这些连接词的使用可以使文本更加紧凑连贯。
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